这样的作文真的能满分吗?(第1期)

很多同学在备考过程中一直想寻找真正的满分作文。但是市面上流行的各种所谓的满分作文实际上并不一定是实考的满分作文。大部分都是老师们自己认为的满分作文。虽然托福写作要求不高，只要思路清晰、语言上没有什么错误的文章都应该是满分，但是我还是想为大家提供一些真正的考场上的满分文章。哪怕29分的我都觉得不够完美（没办法，有强迫症）。

后面我会跟大家分享一系列的满分文章，会涉及不同的话题和题型，这些文章毫无疑问是最值得考生去分析和模仿的。

Although science and technology will continue to advance and improve people's lives, the most significant improvements in the quality of people's lives have already taken place. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

2020-11-16, 2021-05-18

1. 思路分析（1-3分钟）

见到这个题很多同学想要同意，但是同意并不好写。比如，有的学生给的理由是医疗技术已经足够先进了，而且现在也不像过去那样有那么多残酷的战争了。但是这些理由对于大部分学生来说都很难展开成150字左右的一段话。在选思路的时候，千万不要轴，尤其是那些自认为有一些基础的同学。千万要记住，正着不行就反着想。毕竟找现在社会的问题还是很容易的，随便一找就一大堆。比如，现在人压力很大，这是影响人们生活质量的很重要的因素；其次，现在环境污染很严重，这也极大的影响了人们的生活。这两个东西我相信写起来要容易很多。

2. 主题句（1-3分钟）

第2段–压力的段子

The most important problem that still needs to be improved is how to slow down people's pace of life and alleviate their pressures from work and life.

第3段–环境的段子

The second aspect that still has a lot of space for further improvement is environmental protection.

3. 开头（1-3分钟）

With the rapid development of science and technology, people's quality of life has been greatly improved. Many problems that could not be solved in the past have been perfectly resolved through the advancement of technology. Therefore, some people even feel that it is difficult to further improve people's quality of life because the most important improvements have already taken place. In my opinion, this argument is untenable. While I acknowledge that people have indeed made great progress in many aspects of their lives, there are still some problems that have not been addressed. I will focus on two issues below. (100 words)

开头=背景+争议+观点+过渡

其实开头部分对于大部分同学来说完全可以直接背个模板，这样考试的时候能节省很多时间。如果实在不想背但是又写不多的话，可以只留下表达自己立场的那个句子就行。这样可以把主要时间都集中在主体段的写作上。

4. 主体段第1段（10分钟）

The most important problem that still needs to be improved is how to slow down people's pace of life and alleviate their pressures from work and life. Along with the acceleration of social development, people in the modern world are in the face of fierce competition. We are left with no choice but to work very hard to guarantee a decent life, which causes us heavier pressure than before. Under such circumstances, we are likely to suffer from various health problems, since a large number of illnesses are stress-related. It goes without saying that people with ill health have no option but to waste a large amount of money and time on improving health, making it unlikely for them to derive true happiness from their life. I firmly believe that with the advancement of technology, especially artificial intelligence, many of the jobs we do now will be replaced by machines, so people will gradually become less stressed. At that time, people will naturally have more time and energy to focus on their health, which means that it is unreasonable to claim that the most essential improvement on people's quality of life has already taken place. (196 words)

本段虽然看起来有200字左右，但是其实前一半都是现成的。如果我们平时自己没有积累过类似的段子，那最好不要像这一段一样一直说理，最好1个主题句+2句解释然后尽快开始例子，否则很可能会写的十分啰嗦。而且也不一定非要写200字，一个主体段写150左右其实就够了。总之一定要量力而为。既然这个使用了段子的文章能拿到满分就证明段子的质量肯定是没问题的，而且使用段子这种方法也是可以的。并不会像很多同学担心的那样会被判低分，甚至不给出分。当然前提是我们得自己会扣题。

其实大家仔细读的话这段的人称有点乱，我一会儿用第三人称一会儿又回到第一人称，不过没影响得分。大家最好能统一一下。

I firmly believe that with the advancement of technology, especially artificial intelligence, many of the jobs we do now will be replaced by machines, so people will gradually become less stressed. At that time, people will naturally have more time and energy to focus on their health, which means that it is unreasonable to claim that the most essential improvement on people's quality of life has already taken place.

其实扣题也就是扣了两个句子，但是这两个句子至关重要。实在不会扣题的就想着最后重复一下题目。

5. 主体段第2段（10分钟）

The second aspect that still has a lot of space for further improvement is environmental protection. Although increasing numbers of people are aware of the fact that if the environment is polluted, the basic elements people need to survive, such as water and air, will be affected, and thus disastrous results may occur, the environment in many places is still being polluted. Last week I read an appalling story from China Daily. The majority of the residents of a village in the center of China suffer from cancers such as lung cancer, stomach cancer, and lymph cancer. The investigators found that local villagers' drinking water was from a river severely contaminated by the industrial discharges of enterprises located upstream. Local people were outraged at the government and organized a massive protest against environmental pollution. The GDP-oriented government, however, didn't bow to pressure from residents and still did not clean up the polluted river, which poses a serious threat to local urban residents' health. I believe that as society develops further and people's living standards continue to improve, more and more governments will focus on people's health, rather than just emphasizing economic development. And in the future, economic development will no longer be at the expense of the environment, but will rely on the constant innovation of high-tech companies. So, in this respect, it is hard to say that the most important improvements have already taken place. (238 words)

这一段也是类似，前一大半都是环境的段子，最后加上结合题目的连接。

I believe that as society develops further and people's living standards continue to improve, more and more governments will focus on people's health(这里强调将来改进的空间), rather than just emphasizing economic development. And in the future, economic development will no longer be at the expense of the environment, but will rely on the constant innovation of high-tech companies. So, in this respect, it is hard to say that the most important improvements have already taken place. （扣题）

重点表达

Contaminate: to make something less pure or make it poisonous

大部分海岸已受到核废料污染。

Much of the coast has been contaminated by nuclear waste.

Discharge: to send out a substance, especially waste liquid or gas

这个工厂每天排放大量危险的废物。

Large amounts of dangerous waste are discharged daily by the factory.

Outrage: to cause someone to feel very angry, shocked or upset

当地人对轰炸感到非常愤怒。

Local people were outraged at the bombing.

Bow: to do what someone else wants you to do, usually unwillingly

最终政府屈从于公众的压力，被迫对税收进行改革。

Eventually the government was forced to bow to public pressure and reform the tax.

6. 结尾（1-2分钟）

To sum up, based on my previous reasons and examples, there is every reason to argue that there are still some improvements on people's quality of life that have not taken place yet, which greatly weakens the given statement. (39 words)

结尾基本就是个模板，把题目直接融合进去就行了。模板部分如下：

To sum up, based on my previous reasons and examples, there is every reason to argue that 这里融合题目, which greatly weakens the given statement.

通过上面带着大家分析想必大家也发现了，其实真正的满分作文并不难，只要语言简洁、准确，同时思路清楚就可以拿满分。如果大家备考时间比较紧张，平时多积累一些模板和素材可以大大的缩短自己的备考时间。